Halloween Shadow

[boogeyman87]

I'm posting this cause it was on the UHMB but not anymore, plus i've written some more to it . So leave a coment if you wish. :)

Midnight, October 31st 1999. A beat up, rusted 1977 Chevrolet pulled into Lampkin Lane. It stopped shortly there after as the rain and the autumn leaves made it unbearable to see . The figure in the car was unseen as he opened the door and got out. The figures face was barely noticeable as he walked the path to “his” home. It was the shape. He walked the steps to his once inhabited home. As he came to the door the rain beat heavily down on his pale emotionless face. He reached for the doorknob and began to turn it as he heard the sound of tires coming down the street . He receded into the shadows. The car was a Haddonfield police cruiser. It slowed to a stop as it reached the Myers house. The fairly young cop took out a light and shone it over the entire house. The light shone over broken windows, the boarded up door, nothing there….

The cop gave a frown and shut off the light. As the car pulled away the shape rose from behind the bushes blocking the porch. He turned back to the door and put his fist through a panel of the door. The shape extended his hand through the broken door and turned the knob from the inside . The door opened and the shape stepped in. the howling wind slammed it behind him as…..

Darren Matthews watched in fear from behind his bedroom window . He was a skinny kid, barely 17 with a face only his stepmother Lindsey Wallace loved. He turned away from his window and with a sigh said “never…it isn’t possible…” He stopped and turned his head back to the window. “Its been over 20 years .” As he watched the house sit there in the pouring rain his eyes caught so a face in the upstairs window. A face he knew too well from his stepmothers stories of when she was a kid. It wasn’t a human face. It was the shape. He was staring at the street of Lampkin Lane as a whole. Scanning the houses, the suburban cars. Jack lanterns on every step but one. The Matthews home never celebrated Halloween due to Lindsey’s wishes. The shape starred and starred till his eyes met Daren’s . instantly Darren fell backwards and let out a girlish scream.

He regained his balance and fled to his closet where he sat scared that the shape would come for him. The next morning was a murky day caused by the nonstop rain the night before. Daren awoke from the closet. He dressed himself and sluggishly walked downstairs . His stepmother was making breakfast while his dad was already of to work. “How did you sleep last night honey?” asked Lindsey. “Fine” replied Darren. “Ok, I was just wondering cause I heard some noises last night.” said Lindsey. “Look I’m 17 and I don’t need you worrying about me or mothering me!” Darren replied. “Fine, but when you need a mother. I’ll be here.” Lindsey said. “Look, I’m late for school.” said Darren as he threw on his jacket and stepped out the door.

[Dchabz]

i like this story :)

[Thrillogy]

coming along great boogeyman ! remmeber what I said on AIM ;). keep up the great work man.

[boogeyman87]

Thanks , was planing on writing a page or something up last night but didnt . Maybe today . Then hopefully more people will give me their opinions and if i should continue.

[boogeyman87]

Ok i just wrote some more tonight . Its not really much action but its leading up to it so just stick with me please.:)

He walked the path down to the driveway where Samantha Clinton, his outspoken, tomboyish best friend waited for him. “Hey what’s up Daren? You look a little angry.” said Sam. “Its nothing .” replied Daren. “Ok, so guess what happened last night while I was feeding the…” started Sam. “Its just that , she’s always there watching over me. She’s like a fucking hawk.” Said Daren. “Are we talking about your mom again ?” Huffed Sam. “We can’t even celebrate Halloween…” Continued Daren. “Well you know how Michael Myers has that fucking spell over everybody.” said Sam. “Hey Sam. You don’t think he’s alive do you ?” asked Daren. “That bozo? Shit I heard the dude got his head chopped off up in Hollywood.” said Sam. “ Actually it was Summer Glen Sam.” said Daren. “Whatever…what’s it to you. You seeing things or something?” asked Sam. “Or something” replied Daren. With that they continued on to school as the wind blew their coats around.

As Daren and Sam turned the corner of the halls in Haddonfield high school they met up with Max Kennedy. A tall jock type who had nothing else to do but make Daren feel small. “So Matthews, I hear your mom’s a freak and is protesting that the town install a curfew tonight.” said Max. “look I have nothing to do with it, Max” replied Daren. “No shit you do, she’s your crazy mom!” fired Max. Daren turned his back and began to walk away…

“Ya, that’s right walk away you wimp.” said Max. Daren stopped threw his books, turned and began to throw a punch towards Max when he caught Principal Woods with a left hook.
“Good one wimp.” said Max as he walked off with a snicker. “Mr. Matthews , in my office now!” screamed Mr. Woods. Daren hung his head as he walked past Sam and the rest of the crowd.

“I understand Daren that you are having troubles at home but that is no excuse to be throwing your fist in my halls.” said Mr. Woods. “I know, I’m sorry. I just…have…things on my mind .” said Daren. “Well I don’t think there is a need to notify your parents as long as you promise to keep your problems to yourself. Okay Mr. Matthews?” said Mr. Woods. “Yes sir.” said Daren as he got up and walked out of the office. He knew his mother would hear about it some way. She had her fingers in everything around Haddonfield. Very paranoid he thought.

[LP~MyersFan~25]

Pretty good so far. Keep it up.

[boogeyman87]

Here some more, hope some of you are at least interested -

As he walked to 2nd period he saw Sam waving through one of the AP English classes. Sam was smart, too smart for the school. That’s why she spent her time with other things the school called a “waste of intelligence”. She turned back around to have Mrs. Sullivan Breathing down her neck . “Samantha, can you please tell us the reasons why Halloween is celebrated as a cultic holiday?” Asked Mrs. Sullivan. “Well…thousands of years ago Celtics would gather to celebrate samhain…and…” Sam started as she stared around the room at all the blank faces with their eyes rolling. “You know, I don’t know Mrs. Sullivan. Why don’t you explain it .” Sam finished.

After school Daren grabbed his gym bag and walked down the hall of the locker room into the hallway. He ran into Sam. “Hey man , what’s up. I didn’t see you at lunch.” Sam said. “I didn’t feel up to it .” Replied Daren. “ I know what you mean, today I just couldn’t explain one more thing to Mrs. Sullivan. I think she’s a robot trying to get us in on her cult or something.” Sam said. “Sam , your fucking crazy. Listen to yourself.” chuckled Daren. “ Your right , things like that only happen in movies.” said Sam. They continued walking out of the school when the wind began to pick up and the leaves blew around their face. The shape was across the student parking lot, watching Daren with an odd face.

Daren and Sam kept walking oblivious to the shape. He faced them and eyed Sam as she walked ahead of Daren talking back to him. “Wait… so your not coming with us tonight?” Sam asked. “I don’t know. Lindsey would be so scared .” said Daren. “ Yeah. That’s good. Keep the bitch on her toes.” Smirked Sam. “Your right, what time you guys going?” Asked Daren. The shape all the while was listening to them .He overheard as Sam said” 7 o’clock.”

[totempoll]

great job :)

[Beau]

Good stuff:)


Beau Carter:cool:

[boogeyman87]

So more for the fans. I do this for you guys , the members of this board. Without you guys i wouldnt be writing this. Hope your interested.


The shape put his car in park and turned the ignition off. He stepped from the car and walked behind the chain-linked face leading to the front entrance of the school. He stepped inside the shadows as the sun begin to set. A janitor is heard.” Hey…what do you think your doing !” A choke and a thud is then heard as the door slams shut.

Darren sat in his tapping his pencil to the beat of his own drum. He had his homework to the left of him and a picture of Sam to the right of him. He had a choice to be made. Finish his essay on Native American Mythology or… take a night off with the girl he desperately wanted. But Sam didn’t know , at least to his knowledge. Sure they wouldn’t be alone. Sam had friends in all shapes in sizes standing behind her all the time . It didn’t matter , he had to go now.

A knock on the door interrupted him with his thinking. “Daren, dinners ready.” said Lindsey with a sigh in her voice that led to believe there was something left to say in her voice but she stopped herself. He knew he should’ve stayed , but he had to leave. Daren climbed down the vine that was beside his window . He glanced back at the clock and saw that it was 6:52. “Daren I think we need to talk about how I’ve been…well…mothering you.” Lindsey said. She paused waiting for an answer, but heard none. She turned around and trudged back down the stairs.

Daren strolled down the sidewalk and dodged cows, devils, turtles, and even a red power ranger. Behind them he saw a man walking in the distance. Away from Daren and in the direction he was heading himself. The thought crossed his mind, but he wasn’t about to turn his tail and run. Not tonight , this was his night. Anyways the figure turned the corner and kept walking till he disappeared behind some houses.

He continued down a couple more blocks till he stood in front of Sam’s two story house. He saw a small light on in her window hopping it was for him . “Sam.” Daren whispered as he stood under the window with some rocks ready to throw. He threw one and it missed the window and hit the mettle gutter above . The second made a mark and Sam opened the window. “Hey, come on up I have something to show you.” Sam whispered. Daren proceeded to climb the protruding the bricks of the house all the way to the window. As he fell through the window he saw that the TV was on. Frankenstein was on the screen. He paused and begin to be entranced by it. Oblivious to the dark figure emerging behind him slowly with an axe…

[Johnathon]

Good descriptions. You can really picture it. Keep going.

[Thrillogy]

weel the story is kicking ass so far bro ! keep up the great work and remember what I said about key character development and such

[Name-less]

Write more, dammit! :p

[boogeyman87]

Originally posted by Name-less
Write more, dammit! :p

You like it? :eek:

[MMyers89]

I like it. Keep writing man.

[boogeyman87]

Recent coments have made me interested in this story again and i've got some fresh ideas in my mind. Heres the first of what might be a long update.:)




Whack! The sound of the plastic axe echoed off of Daren’s head. “Ahhhhhh…!” screamed Daren aloud as he felt the toy axe against his head. He spun around and widely eyed Sam with hate. “What the FUCK Sam!” screamed Daren. Sam was getting annoyed herself, if Daren didn’t quiet down he would wake up her drunk father from his slumber. She would really murder Daren if he awoke. “Jesus, it was a fake. Just trying to add a little fun to your life Daren.” said Sam. “Look…I don’t think I can do this tonight.” confessed Daren. “ Its just a stroll through Haddonfield…its not sex or anything.” chuckled Sam. Daren hated when Sam brought up things like that.


Sam and Daren briskly waltzed down the street. A few faces Daren didn’t quite know were by his side. Sam’s rebellious chums, complete with their leather jackets and studded army boots. “Daren, I completely forgot…this is Greg, Juliet, and Oxy.” said Sam. “How goes It Daren, care to indulge in a smoke?” asked Oxy. Daren waited for the laugh around them as he said “No thanks”…he didn’t hear it. Maybe these people weren’t so bad. They could be A students just letting down their hair. Then Juliet turned to Daren and lifted her shirt. “How about some of this?” She said bluntly with a smirk on her face. Daren felt his face turn blood red. Everyone laughed including Sam.


The shape stepped around a bush and felt the wind wipe about his faulty face. A little kid no older than nine came walking in front of him. “What are you supposed to be??” asked the bratty kid. The shape looked about and then down to the kid. He breathed………in……out……then walked over the kid. Pushing him to the floor he stepped over his Halloween costume. “Hey you fucking punk!” screamed a man as he came to the kids aid. “You think hurting little kids is fun?” The shape was impatient and stepped closer to the man. “What are you drunk?” The night grew darker and that much colder as a loud shrilled scream was heard, accompanied by a child’s bloody cry.


“Where are we going, its getting pretty pointless walking down the street.” Asked Sam. Daren was surprised, he thought Sam was behind this outing. He suddenly felt very unsafe. ”Keeping with Halloween tradition we are visiting the one the only Haddonfield Memorial Hospital. Long since rundown after the massacre of 78’ and the later fire in 85.” said Oxy. “We’re going in there?” asked Sam with obvious puzzlement. “Of course, who knows we might see a ghost or a witch in there.” cackled Juliet. “What about Michael Myers?” spoke Daren for the first time in over 20 minutes. “If that fucking vegetable is around then I’ll give him hell!” said Greg. An apparent meat head and a follower.


The high school gang , though Daren had been curious if these people he was with were in fact over twenty years old, were rounding the corner to the Hospital. Daren was last in line and as he stepped a dark figure leaped from the bushes and tackled him. “Ahhh…Sam help me!!” Screamed Daren. Juliet fisted the figure and took out a small pocket knife. “Whoa, just stay cool there.” A familiar voice said. It was Max, and Daren knew he was here to scare the living dead up.

[Jeanette]

Very vivid descriptions. Thrilling. I always LOVE to think of a new Halloween story!

Keep up the good work! I really like it Chris :)

[Donnie Darko]

kickin some ass bro, i remember the first parts of it, but i dont think ive read the latter ones.

its very descriptive and not just cause i know the series youre working in but its really detailed. theres usually a detail to sell one more detail. a good formula. ya know, the rain runs down the windows, the red power ranger (everyone has seen one of those), the wind blows a few times, its those things that really keep forward motion to the story.

the style is as close to a movie as you really ask for, such as the part where Darren gets hit by the axe and before you know it WHACK. you keep wondering whats gonna happen next. thats how ya pimp out storyline is to keep us wondering.

i really like the way that as soon as Darren is shown some skin, BAM! theres the shape to intervene. thats such a funny running joke in horror. :)

i really love the "keep that bitch on her toes" line, haha, thats so funny to hear another generations take on Lindsey as a mother, haha. thats the one liner id quote from this story so far, haha.
in a cool way it builds these characters by laughing about a known character like her.
i can imagine that she is gonna have some kind of cool tie-in later just because of the "if you need a mother" line, it kinda builds anything up that you wanna use her for later on (if you decided to anyways.)

[boogeyman87]

I hope you guys continue reading. :)

Lindsey flipped through the channels with a sigh under her breath each time she saw a horrific back story on the ordeal that she was apart of just 21 years ago today. “Has it really been that long?” she thought to herself. She knew she wasn’t in any immediate danger, hell she was just a kid caught up in a family reunion. She couldn’t help but think about her own family. They had moved away from Haddonfield just two months after Halloween 1978. Moved to a small town in Massachusetts where they had family. She had grown up fine. President of her senior class, prom queen, then came the time to leave. She didn’t choose to go back to Haddonfield, it was more of her husbands decision along with her therapists. She had met Jack and Daren right out of college. She knew Daren didn’t like her but she had hoped in time she could change that. “In time” she said.


Max walked the rest of the way to the hospital with Sam, Daren and the others. “ So your visiting a half burned-down, half insanely creepy hospital for Halloween?” questioned Max. “Yeah, are you scared to go? Too small in the pants?” joked Juliet. “I don’t think he wants to come, maybe we should be going too.” said Daren. “ Will you shut…the…fuck up.” said Max. The rest looked to Daren as to see some fire in his eyes, but there wasn’t. Juliet was disappointed, she loved to see people express themselves. Live on the outside and not on the inside. She needed it almost. She knew people thought she was a whore, a tramp and pixie-sticked drug princess. “yeah right.” she said under her breath.


Sheriff Don Nash stepped out of his squad car and right into the path of Lindsey. “Evening Mrs. Matthews, where would you be off to?” said the sheriff. “I’m…just going for a walk. To see the kids on Halloween really brings a smile to my face.” Lindsey said with a smile. “Cut the shit Ma’am, the town knows you think he’s still alive and coming for this little town. You better get back inside before you cause a panic.” the sheriff said sternly. “Lord knows Haddonfield has seen too many. We were doing just fine, Doctor Loomis had passed away and the horror had stopped.” the sheriff stopped. “But sheriff, what about Marion Chambers and those two boys. They were murdered just over a year ago. Did the town forget that?” said Lindsey with a trace of hate in her voice. “That was a copycat murderer and that is what you will say to your boy. Now enough of this , I need to get back to the station.” With that the sheriff returned to his vehicle and left. Lindsey was left standing behind. “Fuck you sheriff, this town may go to hell but my family wont.”


“I would understand if you were scared to come inside.” said Sam. “ I’m a bit spooked myself but we need to do this.” Daren knew if he didn’t that he could count on Max to retell the events of that night to the school crowd. “ You know, I want to go, now.” said Daren with a burst in his voice. He pushed Oxy and Greg out of the way which he didn’t mean to do but he needed to. He made his way to the side door that they were going to enter. The hospital had been burned and charred but only on single side of the building. The rest was left in shambles and contracting mistakes. It didn’t make much sense to just leave it be but Daren imagined the town spent all of its little money on keeping Michael Myers name out of the mouths of the people. The Mayor even went as far as to provide a fake story for the hospitals mistakes. Electrical fire and water damage. Daren felt smarter knowing that sounded dumb, pathetic and impossible at the same time. “Evil damaged this place” spoke Juliet.


All of them were now inside and stopped where the entrance desk used to be. Accompanied by a old chair with a huge dent in the seat. “Well I say we split up and just have ourselves a good time.” said Oxy. He looked around for approval. Sam, Greg and Max went down the west wing and turned a corner. That left Juliet, Oxy and Daren with the straight ahead corridor. Behind them the door swung open and off its hinges to the floor. The shape was approaching the lot and he stopped. He looked at the empty spaces where the cars had used to be. For evil, he had a memory. He carried himself to the entrance and stepped inside.


“This is mine now…” said Greg as he picked up an old worn out looking photograph. “I cant believe they would just leave everything the way it is, not touch it.” spoke Sam. Max was besides Greg looking at the photograph. They were both smiling and laughing. Sam looked over their shoulders and saw the nude woman in the photograph. “Must’ve been a nurse.” said Greg with a smile. “ A stacked nurse at that, blonde hair and all.” laughed Max. Sam noticed their bonding and moved away and into a room. The former nursery was in tact and still had blankets in the cribs. This is making me sick Sam thought. Coming off a natural high Greg turned around, “what’s the matter babe?” Sam cringed at the words. She knew Daren was out of sight but she didn’t want him to know. She spoke, “ nothing, just feeling winded. How about we take a tour of the rooms?” “Awesome.” said Max. Greg dropped the photo into his pocket and said, “shall we.”

[Donnie Darko]

thats a cool concept about the Sheriff giving Lindsey some shit and kinda picking at her. in this genre of stories you kinda expect the Sheriff to be assholish to some people, im sure the sheriff of Haddonfield just sits around for most of the year gossiping with the secretary about this and that.

there was a few lines that i got a good kick out of, like "For evil, He had a memory" and "Cut the shit, Ma'am"
those cracked me up. i can totally hear a cop saying "cut the shit, ma'am"

what you mentioned about the mayor trying to cover the fable of Myers up is a good touch to make, it reminds me of how the people try to keep quiet about Jason Voorhees, its taboo to say it. great touch there with that. it was short and added alot of backbone.

still liking man! keep it coming! youre good at this!

[Thrillogy]

this could be one serious ass film ;) great job so far! more!

[boogeyman87]

I'm thrilled you guys like it! Its going somewhere to! I'm full of ideas. So much to do in a run-down hospital. I'll be writing more tomorrow definately. Look for an update over the weekend. :)


Oh and Project(still like that name) i'm writing the dialouge with these one liners in mind. I'm thinking of these lines you liked and writing better ones and memorable things!

[boogeyman87]

Continued story with a bit of action and romance! :)

Daren screamed in his head at Max. “ Why wont your greasy-haired, letter jacket wearing ass leave! Just go away.” Oxy turned around and Daren was scared he said that out loud. “Hold this” said Oxy as he handed Daren a chair that was blocking a doorway. They were standing outside the former break room of the staff. The shape stepped inside and down the corridors to the left. He heard voices in the direction and he followed them quietly, like he knew how to. “Its not my style, besides I don’t care what the big, fun Oxy thinks of me.” said Juliet. Oxy had been controlling most of his youth and this night wasn’t any different. He wanted it and he wanted it now. Daren knew what it was and it didn’t shock him. He just couldn’t believe how much of a moron Oxy was for having this conversation in front of him. “Come on Daren, lets try the other way.” Said Juliet grabbing Daren’s hand and leaving Oxy in the red. “ Bitch..!” screamed Oxy.

Juliet heard the moan from behind and casually ignored the word. She stopped and embraced the wall behind. Daren stopped too and intuitively put his hand on her shoulder. “ to escape this situation…I find a scream is the best solution.” Daren mouthed with a pleading open smile. “ I never knew you were a poet.” said Juliet with a straight face. “You never knew me at all.” He said with a recurring grin that broke space and moved them closer to one another.
“I hate a guy with a heart and no sense of humor.” replied Juliet. “ I’m one lucky guy then.” said Daren as he moved in to make his move with a kiss. Oxy sat beside a table and chairs with his non-existent friends at each one.

The shape stepped past the doorway as Oxy gave him a awed look. “Huh..?” he let go. He rose from the chair and picked up a piece of metal from the floor. He walked out of the room and there was nothing there. He was scared now and wanted to get Juliet and leave. He walked straight ahead where he though he heard her voice…along with another guys. Most likely Sam’s friend. A thousand steps into his walk he gave up and sat down on the floor. “Where the fuck is everyone?” He saw a flashlight reflect off the wall across from him and he spread to the floor. He saw the light move across in a pattern then down the hall. His eyes saw a local police officer walk across the hall and down another. Oxy got up and began a frantic search for his friends, a jerk and the guy with his girl.


Through the wheezing sound made by Greg a scream could be heard. “God, you’d think people still work here by all the screams going on tonight,” said Max. “I think that was Juliet, definitely a girls voice,” Sam said rising her head from a open file cabinet drawer. They had been rummaging through the previous doctors files. The paint on the wall cracked and peeled with specks of blue and white in them. It was still an amazement that paint still vacated the building. Sam let out a huff and walked over to the door and called out. “ Juliet, is that your moan or scream?” No answer was heard and she knew there was something wrong. Strangely she wasn’t worried, an obvious sign that she held no real attachment to her friend. “I don’t see anyone or hear anything now, we should leave and see what’s going on,” said Sam to the two boys behind her. “Oh yeah, well who is that guy then?” said Max. Greg and Sam turned themselves to Max’s point of view and saw a darkening shape of a thing at the end of the hall. His boots squealed across the floor as he began to move inch by inch. His tattered mask showed signs of wear and grease marks down each side. “…………Ummm…………Greg lets go,” mustered Sam. “Wait babe, I wont to talk to this guy for a sec.”

Greg marched highly towards the shape with fists high in the air and a prepared speech in the back of his throat that he delivered every time he had to make things happen. “First off, Its Halloween, so I think the mask is quite a nice touch. Now, you look about 6 feet, but I’ve got skills you’ve never heard of,” he belted out in one huge breath. “ Yeah peeing your pants kind of skills wouldn’t it be?” snickered Max causing Greg to turn his back to the shape and respond. “ Fuck ………” was the first sound that came out of his mouth as blood followed through. The shape had thrusted his knife through Greg’s chest, out his shirt and through his leather jacket. “You……” he said lastly as he staggered around and hit a few cabinets that were standing in the hall before falling completely to the ground beneath the shapes feet.

Max and Sam bolted and slid through the halls as Myers began his chase. Swiftly but slowly he mad his way behind them. “Come on!!!” screamed Max to a lagging Sam. He grabbed her hand and they swerved down another hall. Sam turned around and saw the monsters eyes. Paler in comparison to his mask but at the same time blacker than the night. They sped up a little , enough to escape the view of the shape for a moment while they entered a room and barricaded the door with their hands. Max reached the knob and locked it. Sam rose her finger to her mouth in a shushing motion. Max was shaking hysterically and in turn jumped back pushing a vacant bed and making it fly against the wall hard. They heard footsteps stop outside and get louder and closer to them. A jiggle of the doorknob confirmed their fate.


The knob was shaking frantically know as the shape began to pound at the door. Shards of glass fell to the floor as the shape kept pound away at the door and dusty blinds. Sam looking around saw the iv stand still with fluids and picked it up. She drew it in front of her chest and charged the door and the open window. The force of it hit the shape and knocked him on his back to the tiled floor. Sam dropped it and ran outside. “Max come on!” she screamed. He still was on the floor trembling with fear. Sam made the decision and ran by herself. She needed to find her true friend and get out now. The shape rose half way up and looked directly into Max’s eyes from across the room. He then rose fully and turned to walk in the direction of Sam. “Oh thank God,” said Max in a crying cowardly sort of voice.

[boogeyman87]

Would anyone like to read this and give me input?

[movieslasher]

awsome guy

[ShadowX81]

this story kicks ass man.

[blicdh]

I just finished reading what you have so far, and I have to say that it is awesome.

I like how you leave off each section like a chapter play.

Bravo!

Encore!

[boogeyman87]

Originally posted by blicdh
I just finished reading what you have so far, and I have to say that it is awesome.

I like how you leave off each section like a chapter play.

Bravo!

Encore!

Thanks for the ego boost. More to come of course when the ideas are delivered. Their not here yet.

[blicdh]

Originally posted by boogeyman87
Thanks for the ego boost. More to come of course when the ideas are delivered. Their not here yet.

You should really switch to UPS...overnight delievery.;)

[boogeyman87]

Originally posted by blicdh
You should really switch to UPS...overnight delievery.;)

I'm sure once I read my HII novel(whenever I can) then the ideas will come. Both this and Impetus are a bit dry right now.

[blicdh]

Originally posted by boogeyman87
Both this and Impetus are a bit dry right now.

No problems...happens to the best of us.

I'm having a little trouble with my poetry, come to think of it. (Not that I need to turn any in, but it's a nice way to express my ideas on life, politics, etc.)

[boogeyman87]

Originally posted by blicdh
No problems...happens to the best of us.

I'm having a little trouble with my poetry, come to think of it. (Not that I need to turn any in, but it's a nice way to express my ideas on life, politics, etc.)

It'll get better soon. Ironically I just wrote something(poetry-wise) I'll share it in the corner. ;)

[Michaeleon]

Hey Chris, that was a great read. I love the idea of a group of kids exploring the ruins of Haddonfield Memorial Hospital on Halloween, it captures the perfect atmosphere. Great thinking. The characters are easy-going, fun to read about, and I like your name choices. You’ve crafted their dialogue well, I’m attached already.
I literally burst out laughing at the part when Max said “Oh thank God” when the shape got up and went in Sam’s direction. Haha, so much for that macho man image! :p

[boogeyman87]

Originally posted by Michaeleon
Hey Chris, that was a great read. I love the idea of a group of kids exploring the ruins of Haddonfield Memorial Hospital on Halloween, it captures the perfect atmosphere. Great thinking. The characters are easy-going, fun to read about, and I like your name choices. You’ve crafted their dialogue well, I’m attached already.
I literally burst out laughing at the part when Max said “Oh thank God” when the shape got up and went in Sam’s direction. Haha, so much for that macho man image! :p

Thanks for your honest and in-depth opinion. Tell your Mod friends about it. ;) Oh and Impetus is also in the thread. But hey, thanks for all the kind words. :D

[boogeyman87]

It continues again. :)


Lindsey tossed and turned between the sheets. Jake was working late on Halloween and Daren was still out there somewhere. She threw the covers off and put on some cloths. She raced down the steps to her old beat up Toyota. “I’ll find you Daren, I’ll save you.” she said to the cat in the headlights of the car as it backed out of the driveway. She didn’t know where to go but knew that her past would lead her there.

Oxy returned from the floor and saw the officer walk into another room. He bolted across the hall and stopped after reaching the elevator. He noticed two shapes on the floor a ways down doing things to each other, he wished it was him. He pushed the button for the elevator and it surprisingly started to crack and creak down from the 3 floor down to his ground level. “Hey…Juliet…mother fucker who is with my girl….get over here.” He said in a low still voice. The two figures looked over at him and began to pull their cloths up and onto their bodies. They walked over and both looked ashamed. “There’s a cop over there,” said Oxy as he pointed his index figure behind him and his middle finger at Darren.

The elevator doors opened up and they all got inside quietly and quickly pushed a button to close the doors. The officer was in sight now and turned to see the doors closing. “ Hey you kids get back here,” said the burley cop with a hoarse voice from his 32 years of smoking. The elevator reached the second floor and stopped. The doors began pounding. “what the fuck is that?” Screamed Juliet. The doors opened and Sam collapsed inwards. “Sam…” said Darren with concern all over his face. Everyone kneeled down to take a look at Sam. “What happened?” asked Oxy. “……Michael Myers……” screamed Sam as she raised herself and began to move to the back of the elevator. Everyone turned their head to the open space outside the door to see a tall lanky figure standing in front of them. His face tilted and his eyes shut.

“………this is…… a joke right Sam.” said Darren. The shape opened his eyes and grabbed Oxy from the cage. The doors shut and Daren, Juliet and Sam pounded on the door as they could hear screams from outside. Yells and cries and blood curdling words being said. Then a butcher knife through the flimsy doors. Accompanied by blood down the sides of it and grunts from Oxy. The elevator began to move up and the knife was retracted from the doors by the shape. The chase was on.

The door opened up at the third floor. It was in pretty bad condition with big gapping holes in the floor from where the explosion had burned through the wood. They raced out and leaped over the holes one by one. They heard the elevator doors close behind them. “Look we’ll just make it across this floor and find the stairs or something” said Darren. “Wait, where’s Max?” asked Darren. “He chickened out and stayed behind when that thing attacked us and…………he got Greg” said Sam, now with her hair down over her eyes and her black eye shadow smeared all over her face. Juliet looked up and over to Sam, in a upset way. They continued to jump and were now 3 gapping holes away from the end of the floor. They heard the doors move rattle again and looked around to see the Shape’s figure walking through the doors.

[blicdh]

Oh, how I do hate the suspense. Do post some more when you find the right wording and the right time. :)

[boogeyman87]

Originally posted by blicdh
Oh, how I do hate the suspense. Do post some more when you find the right wording and the right time. :)

Will do. I'm also working with Impetus. ;)

[blicdh]

Originally posted by boogeyman87
Will do. I'm also working with Impetus. ;)

Alrighty...I'll be on the look out for that.

[myershall]

comeon rite somemore

[boogeyman87]

Originally posted by myershall
comeon rite somemore

Well, did you like what I have so far? Any thoughts on it?

[myershall]

I love it i think ti is awesome

[6Michael6Myers6]

Please hurry...i love it...very suspenseful...never a dull moment...you made the characters identifiable...I WANT MORE!!!

[myershall2]

I hope that you are not out of ideas for this because it is awesome

[benluvin]

its been awhile, since u wrote...hope u still got ideas. its a great story man. keep it up. i want more.

[benluvin]

need more.....hah please
its a great story

[boogeyman87]

Sorry your not getting anymore for a long while. Its not what I want to write anymore. But if you still are interested in my quality of writing then stick around because I've actually got a finished story to put up. Halloween Shadow and Impetus (if I ever finish them) will be around summer. Sorry to dissapoint those two fans I gathered.

[TheShape2005]

Originally posted by boogeyman87
Sorry your not getting anymore for a long while. Its not what I want to write anymore. But if you still are interested in my quality of writing then stick around because I've actually got a finished story to put up. Halloween Shadow and Impetus (if I ever finish them) will be around summer. Sorry to dissapoint those two fans I gathered.

Chris this stuff is vary good man! I love it!

I can't wait till you give us more!!!

[myershall2]

it's okay I can totally wait for it

[slasherfan]

Originally posted by TheShape2005
Chris this stuff is vary good man! I love it!

I can't wait till you give us more!!!

Agreed, I just read through all of this and it's some of the best fan fic I've seen in a while.

[boogeyman87]

If you guys care for it so much then you should read Pig and Penelope. That is finished and is just rotting here in the library.